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Dying, Just Waiting... by ~classic-poet:iconclassic-poet:



Last in line,
Always waiting.
Your turn…
Never seems to come.

You never seem
To stand up for yourself.
You never seem
To owe it to yourself.

Born in a
World of the living,
But you feel
So dead inside.

You never seem
To give your life a chance.
You never seem
To break out of your trance.

Time flew by
Like the wind upon your face.
Standing there,
With your never-ending grace.

You never seem
To show any emotion.
You never seem
To react to aggravation.

Always calm,
Never-ageing.
But inside,
Your mind is old.

You never seem
To say a word.
You never seem
To be absurd.

Around you,
The world is growing.
Only you,
Are dying, just waiting…
©2007-2009 ~classic-poet
:iconclassic-poet:

Author's Comments

This was a poem that I wrote today in writing. I like it... but I feel as though there's something wrong with it. Some help please?

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:iconartistic-poet:
i like it.. the only thing i see that could be 'wrong' is that in some places it rhymes and in others, it doesnt. but i think that gives it a nice quality :) :+fav:

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:boing: Reading Shakespeare's plays makes me happy :boing:
:boogie: Seeing Shakespeare's plays makes me positively euphoric! :boogie:
:iconclassic-poet:
:) Thanks! I know... I didn't want to force it to rhyme. I wanted to go with the flow... you know? :)

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I am never alone,
For God is always with me.
I am a lost sheep,
And God is my shepard.
Always letting me back into the herd,
Eventhough I have strayed countless times.
So don't fret,
When you're lost.
God'll find you,
Again and again.

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